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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72"><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally’s February comments:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora: A Timely piece. Who is your audience? In a few places, you mention vaccines that work “pretty well.” Delete “pretty.” They work well or don’t work well, and “pretty” doesn’t add any scientific data. Near the end, you end a sentence with the word “with”.Re-work the sentence so that it doesn’t end with a preposition. The word “you” should be “your” since the format requires a gerund. The article ends very abruptly with some drastic news. In an article such as this one, I think footnotes and a short bibliogra–phy are in order since there is so much misinformation floating about in the news.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna: I love this continuation of lessons from Grandmother Spider and have no other comments.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard: The first sentence is confusing. Wasn’t it 1980 everywhere, not just in central Virginia. The date and place could be incorporated into the piece. “That is a simple sentence” adds nothing. I also think the sentences about using a bike and your vision could be tightened up. Try re-writing the first paragraph and setting the scene in stronger and shorter sentences. What is a “countrified item?” How was this a war between heaven and hell? It just sounds like hell to me. Good descriptions of the route and your terror. Would a shirt have provided any protection? <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia: This is really, really good with lots of humor and an awareness of small towns. I want to read more. One Question: Did she actually take any photos? <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>