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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72"><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>For everyone:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><b><u><span style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman",serif;color:blue'><a href="https://www.grammarly.com/blog/lay-lie/">Lay/Lie</a></span></u></b><span style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman",serif'> <i>To lay</i> means to put or to place. One way to remember this is that there is an a in both <i>to lay</i> and <i>to place</i>: Posey will lay out her outfit before she goes to bed. <i>To lie</i> means to recline. One way to remember this is that there is an e in both <i>to lie</i> and <i>to recline</i>: Chester will lie down for a nap. Be careful, though. The past tense of <i>to lay</i> is <i>laid</i>: Posey laid out her outfit. The past tense of <i>to lie</i> is <i>lay</i>: Chester lay down for a nap over an hour ago.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>To A Far Away Friend<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Title: To A FAR AWAY FRIEND<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: To A FARAWAY FRIEND<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Spelling: miscarrages<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: miscarriages<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Redundant (double period): ground underfoot..<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: ground.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Insert space: Orhow<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: or how<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Nice line: And tenderly hold Your vanishing self in my heart.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Goodbye Dove<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Punctuation incomplete sentence: Wrapped in a cloth,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>placed in a bag.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>The unfortunate bird lies at rest,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Buried deep with rocks placed on top.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Try: Wrapped in a cloth,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>placed in a bag, <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>The unfortunate bird lay at rest,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Buried deep with rocks placed on top.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Awkward: one of theirs lies here<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: one of their own lay here<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Past of lie/lay: The unfortunate bird lies at rest,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Try: The unfortunate bird lay at rest,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>And<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Do they know one of their own lay here?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Insert comma: Goodbye little dove.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Try: Goodbye, little dove.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Bruised Ribs<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Incomplete sentence: <span style='color:black'>A skid for dragging garden debris,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>one with ribs and a pail of water,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>lying beside a raised-bed wall.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Try: <span style='color:black'>A skid for dragging garden debris,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>one with ribs and a pail of water,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>lay beside a raised-bed wall.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Delete “was”: <span style='color:black'>was no way a controlled landing.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'>Try: <span style='color:black'>no way a controlled landing.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Delete comma: <span style='color:black'>I didn’t, laugh, cough,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Try: I didn’t laugh, cough,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Deanna:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Dust in the Wind<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Insert comma: my uncle, Larry Fisher died<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: my uncle, Larry Fisher, died<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Insert another dash: 60 years-old<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: 60-years-old<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Splitting hair: Throughout our lives,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Throughout my life,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Use name instead of two pronouns: the details of closing up his apartment, the distribution of his possessions—<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: the details of closing up Uncle Larry’s apartment, the distribution of his possessions—<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-top:12.0pt'>Long sentence: She dropped everything to fly to Michigan to take charge and see that all the details of closing up his apartment, the distribution of his possessions--making sure that everyone had some small token of remembrance. and organizing the funeral were properly handled.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-top:12.0pt'>Try: She dropped everything to fly to Michigan and take charge. She saw to it that all the details of closing up his apartment, the distribution of his possessions, and organizing the funeral were properly handled. She also made sure that everyone had some small token of remembrance. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Clarify: My mother knew someone who had done this task for his own father. He agreed to provide this service for Larry. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: My mother contacted a man who had done this task for his own father. He agreed to provide this service for Larry. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Use name, not pronoun: He was brought into the large meeting area<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Larry was brought into the large meeting area<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword “did”: One of the items I did was to hull and slice strawberries in half.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: I helped hull and slice strawberries in half.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Redundant: Ruben remembered the paintings his uncle had painted with their abstract vivid colors.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Ruben remembered the abstract images his uncle had painted with their vivid colors.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>redundent“drift”, reword agreement: The bundles of Larry’s ashes scattered across the land mingling with desert sands, drifted onto mountain slopes in the Rockies and drifted down on the sweet grass of marshy wooded places in Michigan.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: The bundles of Larry’s ashes scattered across the land, mingled with desert sands, drifted onto mountain slopes in the Rockies, and settled on the sweet grass of marshy wooded places in Michigan.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>