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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72"><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Title punctuation: </span>Congratulations! You Are A Winner<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: </span>Congratulations, You’re A Winner!<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Style: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>three million five hundred thousand dollars<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: $3,500,000<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoPlainText><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Delete comma: </span>My phone rings, and I answer.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: </span>My phone rings and I answer.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Delete return: John Wesley Harden with readers Discovery.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Are you familiar<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Try: John Wesley Harden with readers Discovery. Are you familiar<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Delete “some”: There is some more talk.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: There is more talk.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Insert comma introductory phrase: Every so often he asks<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: Every so often, he asks<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Use quotes: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I grunted uh-huh a couple of times<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: I grunted “uh-huh” a couple of times<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Rework: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I think I grunted uh-huh a couple of times, but I avoid ever outright saying the word “yes.”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: I grunted “uh-huh” a couple of times, but I avoided saying the word “yes” outright.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Spell out 3: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>write down 3 pieces<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: write down three pieces<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p>Don’t repeat “down”: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>“I need you to write down 3 pieces of information,” he continues. “Go get a pencil and paper to write this information down.”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p>Try: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>“I need you to write down three pieces of information,” he continues. “Go get a pencil and paper.”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>“He”: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>He was able<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: The caller was able<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p>Reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>He wanted me to turn down the TV so he could give me all my winning details.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p>Try: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>He asked me to turn down the television so he could give me all my winning details.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Tense: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I tell him to hold on while I go get a digital recorder and try to get it to start recording.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: I told him to hold on while I fetched a digital recorder and tried to get it to start recording.</span><o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>“This is 100% legitimate sure. For me here today,” he assures me.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: “This is 100% legitimate. For me, for sure, today,” he assured me.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Typo/reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>“I want you to me listening keenly,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: “I want you to listen keenly,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Punctuation: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>name of company Publisher's Copy House<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: Name of company - Publisher's Copy house<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Reword: The rd company. Stands for reader's Discovery.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: “rd” Stands for Reader's Discovery.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p>Reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Now he asks me to verify that back.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p>Try: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>He asks me to repeat the information.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p>Tense: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I repeat back what he told me to write down.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p>Try: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I repeated what he told me to write down.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>(PCH short for Publisher's Copy House RD stands for Reader's Discovery)”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: (PCH is short for Publisher's Copy House, and RD stands for Reader's Discovery)”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>“You're also going to need having down my full name<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: “You're also going to need my full name<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Now you’re going to have down the amount of money<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: Now you’re going to write down the amount of money</span><o:p></o:p></p><p><o:p> </o:p></p><p>Reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>“And, you have down your 3 million 500 thousand dollars??”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p>Try: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>“And, you wrote down $3,500,000??”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Insert comma: <span style='color:black'>In life they know<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Try: In life, they know<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Insert comma: <span style='color:black'>Finally she found<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Try: Finally, she found<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Deanna:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Delete comma: they would get twelve cents a lug and Lisa was still light enough<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: they would get twelve cents a lug, and Lisa was still light enough<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Insert comma: Her small nimble fingers worked fast too. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Her small nimble fingers worked fast, too. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Redundant: She was sure to have enough money to buy one impractical thing just because it was pretty. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: She was sure to have enough money to buy the pretty sweater, even though it was impractical. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Who are “they?” they had to share two pairs of boots between the three of them. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>One had to stay inside<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Paragraph break / join with following sentence: She also needed heavy winter under things, like long-johns and wool socks. Thinking of them made her feel itchy. She scratched…<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Delete comma: There were no screens on the windows of the sheds, where the pickers slept. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: There were no screens on the windows of the sheds where the pickers slept. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Delete comma: It was so hot and humid at night, that she kept kicking off the thin cotton sheet<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: It was so hot and humid at night that she kept kicking off the thin cotton sheet<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Reword: Anyone sleeping on a lower bunk, had it raining straw down on them every time the person above them turned over. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: Anyone sleeping on a lower bunk had straw raining on them every time the person above them turned over. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Comma useage: glad her brothers, Mike and Ryan shared the bunk<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>try: glad her brothers, Mike and Ryan, shared the bunk<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>reword: Grandma slept with her baby aunt, three-year-old Abby, she would hear about it each time she wiggled the least bit.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>try: Grandma slept with three-year-old Abby, Lisa’s aunt, she would hear about it each time she wiggled the least bit.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>grown up bucket?: She wished she was big enough to wear her bucket on a strap over her shoulder like the grown ups, but a full grown up bucket would have pulled her over backwards she guessed.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: She wished she was big enough to wear her bucket on a strap over her shoulder like the grown ups, but a full bucket would have pulled her over backwards, she guessed. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: "Get up from there and stop that braying like a donkey! Sugar girl, are you alright?” he called<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: "Get up from there and stop that braying like a donkey! “ he instructed his son. “Sugar girl, are you alright?” he called to his daughter.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Insert comma: "Get me down pa,"<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: "Get me down, pa,"<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Insert comma: Soon aunt Martha<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: Soon, aunt Martha<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Punctuation: "You are an angel Lisa, unlike some I could name!" she said, glaring at her older John.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: "You are an angel, Lisa, unlike some I could name,” she glared at her older brother, John.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Punctuation: "Here aunt Mattie,"<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: "Here, Aunt Mattie,"<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Reword: Worst though were picking cucumbers for the pickle companies. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: Worst though was picking cucumbers for the pickle companies. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Delete dash and comma: The car they come-in, looks on its last legs.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: The car they come in looks on its last legs.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Insert comma: enough trouble on their hands I think."<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: enough trouble on their hands, I think."<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Typo: six year-aold face<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: six-year-old face<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Punctuation: Well enough wool-gathering, she had a lot of cherries to pick, if she was going to earn enough to buy a cherry red sweater for school!<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='margin-left:1.0in;text-indent:.5in'>Try: Well, enough wool gathering. She had a lot of cherries to pick if she was to earn enough to buy a cherry red sweater for school!<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Prompted by rain in February<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Change word?: Having left his body alone,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Having left his body behind,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Delete apostrophe: gods’<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: gods<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>