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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72"><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Characters and Definitions<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Attacker, Mage, Thief, Farms: Delete “Province that”?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Provides…<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Punctuation: Warriors: Have strong well trained and loyal armies.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: Warriors: Have strong, well-trained, and loyal armies.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Too many rulers and provinces!<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Lead with name<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Humble Sir Dog Breath <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Dwarf shepherd<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Hollow Dogs Province<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>small attacker<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>weak<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>More concise, limit list to only the top two or three players…<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Hopeful Hands<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>All except two words are only one or two syllable words, “purposeful and bewildered”<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Suits mood, basic going through motions<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Still hopeful – wake, spring, willing, lifted, warmth<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I Remember Schindler<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Put into quotes? <span style='color:black'>May my country always be right!<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Though whether it be wrong or right –<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Try: “May my country always be right!<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Though whether it be wrong or right.” –<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Redundant?: strays away<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Play on words?: trumps corruption?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Typo?: <span style='color:black'>oTruth<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Try: Oh, truth<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Deanna:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Lessons My Mother Taught Me<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Punctuation – consider semicolon: Sometimes love means forgiving,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>It only hurts more if you can’t.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Try: Sometimes love means forgiving,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>It only hurts more if you can’t.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Consider dash: Be honest even when no one knows.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Try: Be honest - even when no one knows.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Delete comma: There is always enough love -<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>If you keep giving it away.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Try: There is always enough love<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>If you keep giving it away.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Punctuation: Thank you mom for the lessons,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>You taught me by your example.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Try: Thank you, Mom, for the lessons<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>You taught me by your example.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>