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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link=blue vlink=purple><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Cleora<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Farm: Province that provides resources to another kingdom or ruler. Doesn't do anything to help the kingdom he is in. If a province is part of a kingdom, then you need to change (he is in.) to they are in.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Inactive: Ruler that serves himself only. Doesn't do anything to help the kingdom. May also be a farm. If this definition stands for both a ruler and a farm, consider revising. For example: <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal align=center style='text-align:center'>Inactive: Farm or ruler that serves only their own interests. Doesn't do anything to help the kingdom. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Science Pump: When the ruler orders the colleges of the province to train the army, mages, and thieves in the latest skills and techniques of their field.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>This is confusing. If mages and thieves are provinces, Then are the colleges provinces that provide training in advance techniques to the army of the kingdom and individual provinces within the kingdom tasked with performing the offices of mage or or thief? It seems odd that individual geographic locales would be assigned tasks rather than individuals who exhibit talents in those skills. Perhaps you need definitions for kingdom and province first. I thought Crystal Pond was a kingdom with Sitting as ruler. Then what is the larger division of which her kingdom is a part called? Is that then an alliance? <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>rogues: Skilled thieves. If thief refers to a province who’s citizens are skilled in spying, stealing, then are rogues skilled individuals with in a thief?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Shepherd: Humble. Expert farmers, thus able to survive drought & storm better than other provinces. If this is a province, shouldn’t it go up in the list of province designations with farm, mage and thief, instead of with the personalities list?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Ruler: Lady Doom the Sorcerer<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Race: elf mystic<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Province: The Scarlet Witch<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Role: medium mage / Archmage (Wouldnn’t her role be sorceress, she isn’t a province.)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Condition: light<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Ruler: Toby the rogue<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Race: Halfling rogue<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Province: Walton On The Hill <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Role: large thief / Head of Thieves (Confusing again. If a thief is a province, then an individual can’t be one unless you want to change thief to a guild and a profession like ruler, sorceress, mystic etc. Guild<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Condition: weak (154.8)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Ruler: Dark Merlin the Sorcerer<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Race: faery Mystic<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Province: Dravens Darkside (9)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Role: medium mage / Minister of the Underground<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Condition: unknown<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Again, he can’t be a mage since you list that as a kind of province. He has to be a mystic, a or sorcerer.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Ruler: Sir Pierson the Sorcerer <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Race: faery Mystic<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Province: Sworn to Penetrate (16)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Role: small mage<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Condition: light ( Same problem as above He can be a faery, for race and mystic as his role, but he isn’t a province unless a province is something other than a geographic location but a designation of a role.<o:p></o:p></p><div style='mso-element:para-border-div;border:none;border-bottom:solid windowtext 1.0pt;padding:0in 0in 1.0pt 0in'><p class=MsoNormal style='border:none;padding:0in'><o:p> </o:p></p></div><div style='mso-element:para-border-div;border:none;border-bottom:dotted windowtext 3.0pt;padding:0in 0in 1.0pt 0in'><p class=MsoNormal style='border:none;padding:0in'><o:p> </o:p></p></div><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>By those who placed self over honor.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I am not sure how you meant this line. Perhaps<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>By those who placed gain over honor? I realize self interest would change the syllable count.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Who battled to save the conscience –<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>not the venal might – of his people.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>(I think he actually acted on his own conscience. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I liked the double meaning of the last line.<o:p></o:p></p><div style='mso-element:para-border-div;border:none;border-bottom:dotted windowtext 3.0pt;padding:0in 0in 1.0pt 0in'><p class=MsoNormal style='border:none;padding:0in'><o:p> </o:p></p></div><p class=MsoNormal>***<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>ankles should be changed to ankle unless you did nick both ankles and in that case, spot should be changed to spots. rubbed the spot should be rub the spots in that case.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Resigned, I clip Vivi’s collar. Perhaps, I clip Vivi’s leash to her collar?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I suggest dropping the first (As) and begin the sentence with Viviane pullse me with purpose into the present. I liked this ending sentence. You did an excellent job of the craziness of life’s pressures and the release of going out for a walk with your dog. Dogs live in the moment and they indeed can center us.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>This has been a difficult year’s journey for you. Thank you for trusting us to understand and allowing us to stand by you through it. You are a talented poet. I think you should gather these poems and present them as a chapbook. Thank you for sharing your journey.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Warm Regards,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>