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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link="#0563C1" vlink="#954F72"><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>For Cleora:<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Dialogue punctuation tips –<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto;margin-left:0in;text-indent:-.25in;mso-list:l0 level1 lfo1'><![if !supportLists]><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol;color:#222222'><span style='mso-list:Ignore'>·<span style='font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"'> </span></span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'>Start a new paragraph for each speaker<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto;margin-left:0in;text-indent:-.25in;mso-list:l0 level1 lfo1'><![if !supportLists]><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol;color:#222222'><span style='mso-list:Ignore'>·<span style='font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"'> </span></span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'>When one character’s dialogue extends to more than one paragraph, start each subsequent paragraph with a double quotation mark, and place your closing double quotation mark only at the end of the final paragraph.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto;margin-left:0in;text-indent:-.25in;mso-list:l0 level1 lfo1'><![if !supportLists]><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol;color:#222222'><span style='mso-list:Ignore'>·<span style='font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"'> </span></span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'>Place punctuation inside the quotation marks, the dialogue tag outside: </span><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Sabon LT W01 Italic",serif;color:#222222'>“John was just here asking about you,” Jim said. </span><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto;margin-left:0in;text-indent:-.25in;mso-list:l0 level1 lfo1'><![if !supportLists]><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol;color:#222222'><span style='mso-list:Ignore'>·<span style='font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"'> </span></span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'>The attribution tag goes after the first clause of a compound sentence: “Not tonight,” he said, “not in this weather.”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto;margin-left:0in;text-indent:-.25in;mso-list:l0 level1 lfo1'><![if !supportLists]><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol;color:#222222'><span style='mso-list:Ignore'>·<span style='font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"'> </span></span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'>When dialogue ends with a question or exclamation mark, the dialogue tag following the quotation marks should be lowercase: </span><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Sabon LT W01 Italic",serif;color:#222222'>“I’m glad you’re here!” she said.</span><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto;margin-left:0in;text-indent:-.25in;mso-list:l0 level1 lfo1'><![if !supportLists]><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol;color:#222222'><span style='mso-list:Ignore'>·<span style='font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"'> </span></span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'>Action before dialogue takes a separate sentence: </span><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Sabon LT W01 Italic",serif;color:#222222'>Anna shook her head. “I can’t believe she’s gone!”</span><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto;margin-left:0in;text-indent:-.25in;mso-list:l0 level1 lfo1'><![if !supportLists]><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol;color:#222222'><span style='mso-list:Ignore'>·<span style='font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"'> </span></span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'>Quoting within a quote requires single quotation marks: </span><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Sabon LT W01 Italic",serif;color:#222222'>“Lucy, Mom specifically said, ‘Do not cut your bangs,’ and you did it anyway!” </span><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto;margin-left:0in;text-indent:-.25in;mso-list:l0 level1 lfo1'><![if !supportLists]><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:Symbol;color:#222222'><span style='mso-list:Ignore'>·<span style='font:7.0pt "Times New Roman"'> </span></span></span><![endif]><span style='font-size:14.5pt;font-family:"Georgia",serif;color:#222222'>When action or attribution interrupts dialogue, use lowercase as dialogue resumes: “That,” she said, “hurt bad.”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>I can see this as chapters in monthly children’s magazine like Highlights. Each month would need a recap but you did that well here.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I kind of liked the name Dog Breath…<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword/quoes?: Yesterday, late,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: “Late yesterday, <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>??? (1:48).<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Opening quote or continuation: "We also received<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>"You already know about<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>…<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Closing quote Also, the CBM is beeping. You have an urgent message.”<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Quote inside quote: "On April 24, at 15:00 we received this note.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>To the Honorable Queen Sitting Duck<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Please attend a meeting at my castle this afternoon to discuss what to do about Silent Enigma.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Signed, Sir Dragon of Legacy of Dragons in the kingdom of Hades Legions."<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Follow example…<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Try: "On April 24 at 15:00, we received this note, ‘To the Honorable Queen Sitting Duck: Please attend a meeting at my castle this afternoon to discuss what to do about Silent Enigma,’<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>signed Sir Dragon of Legacy of Dragons in the kingdom of Hades Legions."<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>“on” instead of “of”: the names of two of the messages<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: the names on two of the messages<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>“looking” repeated six time – use Thesaurus, powerful options: she twisted her head first one way and the other looking at everything. …she started looking all around. …Then she looked up at the clouds. …<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>Grasshopper shifted his position to look around the edge of the shield …<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText>“Look out!” …which caused grasshopper to be looking to the side <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoPlainText><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Use of semicolons?<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>So slender<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: slender<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Still miss<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: miss<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>But for Laurence who lovingly guides me<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Try: except for Laurence who lovingly guides me<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Like the idea, topic<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='color:black'>Want to squash a taboo topic,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>Try: Want to squash a topic, make it taboo?<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>a word that stands for writing death,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>try: a word that guarantees writing death,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>thou shalt not<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>try: “thou shall not”<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>we ought to be having, of course,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>of those things that really matter<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>try: we ought to be having, of course,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>about those things that really matter<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>delete such as<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>Manuscripts melt like melting flowers,<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal style='mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto'><span style='color:black'>Overuse “melt”?<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Deanna<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Spelling: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>to heart-sick<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: too heart-sick<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Capitalize: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>each of my dogs<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: Each of my dogs<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Love the analogy like a mail order bride<span style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman",serif'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Delete comma: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>My younger daughter, Kassia was four.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: My younger daughter Kassia was four.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Double negative?: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>She couldn’t understand why I wouldn’t allow her to go to guide dog school training without her.t<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: She couldn’t understand why I would go to guide dog school training without her.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Insert comma: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>should be allowed to come this time too.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: should be allowed to come this time, too.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Delete comma: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>It wasn’t until the first snowfall, that she began to demonstrate her true personality.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: It wasn’t until the first snowfall that she began to demonstrate her true personality.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Understanding?: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>the park door (to relieve?)<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=yiv7115103424msonormal>Rearrange “usually”: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>they told me it was a man usually wearing a hat staring at us.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=yiv7115103424msonormal>Try: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>they usually told me it was a man wearing a hat staring at us.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=yiv7115103424msonormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'> <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Clarification: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>My dog understood she had misbehaved, but she certainly didn’t understand the verbal threat.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>If a guide dog gets distracted by sniffing another person, seeks their attention or distracted from concentrating on guiding their blind handler, the consequences could be disastrous to the blind person.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: If a guide dog gets distracted sniffing another person, seeking their attention, or isn’t concentrating on guiding their blind handler, the consequences could be disastrous.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Reword: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>another elderly woman stopped her car in the road to threaten us with reporting us to the SPCA for cruelty to our dog<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: an elderly woman stopped her car in the road and threatened to report us to the SPCA for cruelty to our dog…<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Use name (just referred to daughter): <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I retired her after four years<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: I retired Irish after four years<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=yiv7115103424msonormal style='text-align:justify'>Dangling?: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I quickly switched the harness to the correct dog, handed Irish the mail and sent her back up the driveway to my daughter where she stood on the porch. <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=yiv7115103424msonormal style='text-align:justify'>Try: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>I quickly switched the harness to the correct dog, handed Irish the mail and sent her back up the driveway to my daughter who stood on the porch. <o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman",serif'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>“and” instead of comma: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Although she was capable of excellent guiding, loved getting into her harness, she was an odd combination of soft and stubborn.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: Although she was capable of excellent guiding and loved getting into her harness, she was an odd combination of soft and stubborn.<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Avoid using “after” twice: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>After Irish refused to get up after I was told to correct her for walking me into a blackberry bramble growing out on the shoulder of the road<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: After Irish refused to get up when I was told to correct her for walking me into a blackberry bramble growing out on the shoulder of the road<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'><o:p> </o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal>Spelling: <span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Iresh taught me<o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><span style='font-size:10.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black'>Try: Irish</span><span style='font-size:12.0pt;font-family:"Times New Roman",serif'><o:p></o:p></span></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>