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<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>This poem is beautiful in the way it captures a
mood by its story telling and descriptions.<span style="mso-spacerun:yes">
</span>My suggestions are based on my obsession for melody and rhythm.<span style="mso-spacerun:yes"> </span>I also think the piece would benefit from a
greater conservation of words.</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"> </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">EACH DAY A BLESSING</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>good title.</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"> </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"> </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">The jangle of her collar and</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">The click of toenails on the kitchen floor</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>Leave out (the)</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Flood me with relief in the pre-dawn.</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>Again, leave out (the).</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Today will not be the day I wake my husband</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>Try,Today is not the day.</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">With the news his service dog has died. </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>Leave out (the).</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Nearly fourteen, she has survived another night,</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Rising, albeit stiffly, despite the indignities of
old age. </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>Leave out, (albeit).</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"> </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Her soft muzzle touches my hand expectantly</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>Leave out, (expectantly).</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">For the biscuit I offer each morning. </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Following a crunch, her nose sniffs my hand again,</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>You don’t need (her nose). What else is she going
to sniff with? Simply say, “She sniffs my hand again.” </u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Her tail thumping against a cabinet as</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Another treat slips into her eager mouth.</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Two old ladies with their quiet ritual</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>One of your<span style="mso-spacerun:yes">
</span>best lines.</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Of biscuits and coffee greet the dawn.</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>I would consider using<span style="mso-spacerun:yes"> </span>(greeting) instead of (greet).</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"> </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">Her nose insistently bumps my arm for a third treat.</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>Try (her insistant nose).</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">I give it, along with an admonishment of </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">“No more!” in mock severity, showing empty hands.</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">She licks my fingers in thanks or</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">In search of crumbs and pads down the hall</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>try, In search of crumbs, pads down the hall.) Put
a comma after crumbs.</u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">While, smiling, I reach for my mug.</p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><u>Leave out (While). </u></p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"> </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal">
Sally Rosenthal </p>
<p class="aolmailmsonormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:Calibri"> </span></p>
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