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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link=blue vlink=purple><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Sally,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Laurence’s Promise<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I loved the poem. The only thing I would suggest changing is the two lines beginning with the (this.) In thesecond line of the poem, I would use the word (the) instead.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I didn’t think there was any problem with the two mentions of his breed, but you might try broad heavy head if you wanted to make a change here. Or, you could use Labrador and retriever the second time.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Why Cockatiel Wings Cross<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>In the first sentence,the phrases that mention humans invented clocks and the ending phrase but not as many as there are now don’t seem to fit together.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I would drop the end phrase starting from the (but.) You might try (to announce morning and start their day. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I would change would launch to launched. If you do decide to change the tence, then would stand to stood needs to be done. You need to change their head to their heads. When you talk about the changes and in the feathers on top of their heads.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Leonard,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>A Robin’s Fortune<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>In the line about their quarrels, loves would be more constant than love since it comes between quarrels and dreams. I thought of cats as likely predators. They will travel on fences and can jump from one high branch to another when they want to avoid dogs. Also, they play with their kills and don’t always eat it after it dies. They lose interest when it stops twitching and find something else to play with.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>This was a fun exercise of imagination. I think modern children get little opportunity to use their minds in this passive play society where toys do all the work.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal> <o:p></o:p></p></div></body></html>