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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link=blue vlink=purple><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>I just realized I never sent anyone my notes from November 29<sup>th</sup> critique session!<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I guess it is better late than never.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Sally,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>October 2017<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Thought provoking and well written.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I have no corrections or suggestions.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Mary Jo<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>On Second Thought<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Is this a pprocrastination guide? (smile)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I am beginning to recognixze your light humor even about not feeling physically up to meeting the day’s challenges.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I enjoyed the poem and can offer no corrections.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>The story is interesting. There are a lot of details to work out. Is the community within the walls self-sustaining? How are the bicycles and other tools manufactured? The smelting of ore and production of metals would be very difficult to accomplish without sight. The making of handtools would even be difficult. Once they were made, then the working of wood to produce other equipment might be possible. Perhaps the programming of 3D printers could be done by a blind person, but they require feedstock material to use to build up the objects the printers are designed to produce. Operating machines to hsape and cut metal can be done by blind machinists as I know several people who do this work, but somepone would have to make the original machines and what happens when they wear out? Watchmaking would be pretty difficult as the parts would have to be so small. I can understand making large clocks, but a wristwatch would be impossible. Also, would blind people need wristwatches? They don’t need to limit their work to daylight hours. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marcia<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>The first thing I found was a superfluous () in front of the word (girlfriends)<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I liked the line: spit-out like a watermelon seed.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Except that people were calling for Buddy, I wondered if he was a spirit dog. An avatar for future guide dogs.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Buddy is the name given by Morris Frank, to the dog trained to guide him as the first guide dog to guide a blind person in the United States.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I found the piece engaging.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>DeAnna Noriega<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>a <o:p></o:p></p></div></body></html>