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</o:shapelayout></xml><![endif]--></head><body lang=EN-US link=blue vlink=purple><div class=WordSection1><p class=MsoNormal>Cleora,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>The Groove in the Ceiling<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>As usual, I would change a few tenses. The chemistry teacher said instead of was saying.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I don’t recognize the word “Woot” perhaps some other word here.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I would change “headed with a brisk walk” to “walked briskly. <o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>“Thoughts of “I should ask my Dad” I thought—“I should ask my Dad!”<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I liked the scrambling to decide and wondering what Dad would think and how to get it home. It was very real.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Mary Jo,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>I thought this needed a better title. I liked the rhythm, pacing and whimsy. No other suggestions.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Bonnie,<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Angel died Saturday seemed to make the article immediate, but I thought it happened quite a while ago.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Needs some updating work.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Marilyn<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Where There is Smoke<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>Lots of well-done energy, panic and confusion.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal>No suggestions.<o:p></o:p></p><p class=MsoNormal><o:p> </o:p></p></div></body></html>